together at the beach

I think the summary for this one is too long for bsky so, instead. Here's Chapter 10: The Bird and the Beast

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"Hm. Now why would Hajime Utsujou meet with Trainer Watanabe?" archiveofourown.org/works/722720...

Yeah, I agree. It gives the events some level of authenticity and security that first person doesn’t provide. These aren’t events that are maliciously being misconstrued, these are events…sorta. Biases and misinfo still are a huge part of third limited hut like, yeah.

Shit I just realized, I misread your meaning here.

But if you want a story that purely revolves around one person’s detachment and dissociation from themself, second person is. a really interesting choice for it

Granted, third person limited also can ebb and flow. If you need to convey the dissociative detachment in third person, you can get it across too with third person limited.

And the benefits from second person in this scenario is that you can switch to ‘I’ much more naturally when ‘I’ decide not to detach ’myself’ anymore

Because ’you’ can be observing ’yourself’, you feel me?

Although I somewhat agree, the benefit of third person limited for me is that personal feeling. Because if I wanted to give the detached-self, impersonal, “oh fuck something’s up” feeling, I’d use second person

Third person limited’s, admittedly, quite similar. You are slightly more detached but it’s still very close. The key there is that you are allowed to use a lot more dramatic irony and show how different people view the world, whereas first person is limited to the ‘i’ narrator

But, yeah, the big thing to remember for first person stories is the unreliability. You are filtering the world through this person’s eyes, thus all their bias comes through.

You, notably, can combine the two, just make sure you have a special indicator to denote when leaving and come back to first person happens (not x’s pov, just something simple like a special line break).

To be fair, this is also important in third person limited, but it’s especially important in first person (especially if it’s not a combo third person limited and first) as they are the only voice you get.

Really, it depending on the needs of your story. If having the point of view tied down to your first person narrator is important, then it’s important to lean into their unreliability and bias in most situations.

First person, however, also happens to have a pretty high skill floor to do it well, so like. yeah, it’s not as simple as slamming down the ”i”

I should specify here that I mean one character’s thoughts, since third person limited tends to give access to many people’s thoughts. both of which lead to great instances of unreliable narrator, but I believe the inherent limitation of first person is interesting to explore

It’s a trick you can only really do once in a given story—but goddamn if done right it can really fuck you up.

Especially if it’s to display a dissociative state, or there’s a big Reason why the narrative is referring to “you” rather than “i”

Second person prose, on the other hand, is almost always invasive and intentionally so. You Did Not Do This yet the story say you did which creates a fascinating dissonance while reading it

For me first person prose can be likened to reading someone’s diary, or like having full access to someone’s thoughts while having a level of separation between reader and character purely based on the fact that you are Not this person.

THEY’RE SO CUTE LOOK AT THEM

It’s pretty similar! Don’t worry about it. I do have some Art of it I’ve been saving for an upcoming chapter but, genuinely, this is really good art of her

Hmm i wonder who these girls are

Three Weeks Of Brutal Training for Noiku to learn

Surprisingly enough, I think she’d wear ouji lolita (i think that’s what ‘prince’ lolita is called)

This would actually be so funny

Since they’re all 2003 gen, perhaps a funny trio interaction drawing between them in order

READ IT, I COACHED NOIKU ON HOW TO FIGHT SCENE SO HARD AND SHE *COOKED* WITH IT.

Volume of inspired fics, not Never Left Behind specifically.

Out of the ones I am Mostly keeping up with—blame classwork for lack of time—My favorites are: Heiress to the Overlord and Blackbird.

Never Left Behind is also very cute—but given the volume I. haven’t had time to keep up.

You could also read mine if you so wish—it’s linked on my bsky.