A series of google docs comments, going in 2 columns. "I still can NOT believe this is happening, just for the record :D" Reply from Tavylia Sin: "can't wait for how you'll feel by the end" "LIA!!" Reply from Tavylia Sin: "I'm too funny for my own good ;)" "I see you watching! Reply from Tavylia: "YOU SEE NOTHING get back to your clown smut :P" "Sorry, Mistress! Right away, Mistress! Don't pull out the make-up, Mistress!" (clown emoji reaction) "That is a really lovely sentence" (Face with hearts emoji reaction) "To my immense surprise, WIthers has GAME!" Tavylia replied: "Oh he very much does. Even I was looking at him like...damn ok me next." "YES HELLO POLICE?" "I do not like this sentence! I don't like how it begins, I don't like the picture that beginning paints in my brain and I don't like the trip it's taking my eyes on as it continues! Heeeeelllppppp ..../affectionately........???" Tavylia replied "do I need to change it, or are we staying in the cursed-ish smut-puns?" Line from the document draft: "As before, Withers did not rush. He was uncertain if such a feat were even possible, given how his bones near rattled from the persistent shivers that were not born of the chill in the air." Comment: "This is elder abuse..... :D" Another sample from the draft: "Head, you say?" A wry smile spread at his words and the wink that came with it. Comment: "[sound of ice cubes clinking as a stiff drink is poured]" "Actual guffaw for this" "Here is one golden trope point for you!" "I CAN'T" "You're on fire and I hate that you make this work."

Some top picks so far from my heroic beta reader going over #Withers x #DribblesTheClown - shared with permission, or as she put it:
"Please do! More people need to share my pain"

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