Comic page from grand adventure yonder
Susan’s tailors, the next morning.
PANEL 1:
A wide-shot showing mannequins, dresses, fabric and shelves, Susan is in front, closer to the door. Corry is sitting at a bench sewing. His nose and knuckles look less bruised now.
PANEL 2:
A close-up of Corry's eyes, he looks worn out.
PANEL 3:
A view of Corry's sewing, his knuckles are less bruised looking.
PANEL 4:
He rubs his right wrist, like it's in pain.
PANEL 5:
The doorbell rings.
SFX
DING DING
PANEL 6:
Susan gets up to greet the customer. A man is in the doorway, seen from behind. (It’s Rayne.)
Susan
Ah, good afternoon, sir. How can I help?
Rayne
Hello, my good woman! I heard that this was the only shop with a supply of silk on the island. I was hoping that you could help with an aquamarine dressing gown?
Susan
Silk? Why yes, of course.
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PANEL 1:
Full body shot of Rayne inside the shop
He exclaims “Wonderful!” Rayne is still wearing his street clothes. He's looking very comfortable in the space.
PANEL 2:
Susan, looking at Rayne and then to Corry.
Susan
Let's get you measured.
Corry?
PANEL 3:
Corry, looking down at his sewing.
Corry
Ah, yes, let me get the…
PANEL 4:
Corry, looking up, craning his head, a bead of sweat on his face.
Corry
…tape… meas-
PANEL 5:
Rayne is looking down at him like a piece of meat, grinning.
PANEL 6:
Comedically low effort Corry.
Corry
Um… sir, is everything alright?
PANEL
7:
Rayne, arms spread, dancing for joy.
Rayne
Why of course! I am a connoisseur of textiles surrounded by experts. It's a dream come true!
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PANEL 1:
Corry is taken aback by Rayne's whimsy. His arms limp at his side, holding the tape measure as Rayne's arm stretches across the frame.
PANEL 2:
Corry, embracing whimsy, laughs with a
Corry
heh
PANEL 3:
Corry asks, smiling tiredly, twanging his tape-measure.
Corry
And may I measure you, oh grand connoisseur?
PANEL 4:
Rayne, recognising Corry's willingness to play along, grins, a hand slightly covering his face.
PANEL 5:
Rayne strikes a pose while Corry measures him, crouching down.
Rayne
Of course, my boy!
Corry
So tell me, what brings you to CUMRAY?
Rayne
I’ve been doing some odd jobs on land recently.
Corry
On land?
Rayne
Why yes! I’m a man of the sea, born and bred.
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PANEL 1:
Rayne is leaning on a mannequin as Corry takes his chest measurement. Rayne looks down wistfully.
Corry
That must be quite the life.
Rayne
It’s incredible.
PANEL 2:
A closer view of Rayne's face looking down, surprised.
PANEL 3:
A shot of Corry’s hurt knuckles.
PANEL 4:
Rayne grabs his right hand, exclaiming.
Rayne
Oh wow, hey, what happened here?
PANEL 5:
Rayne pulls Corry's hand closer to get a good look. Corry looks up at Rayne with utter horror.
Rayne
Ouch! I didn't take you for a fighting man, Mr tailor. This need’s bandaged!
Corry
Please let go.
Chapter 1 of Grand adventure yonder is complete and I thought I’d share the lead up to one of my favourite scenes so far.
I’m glad Corry got to have this moment of whimsy before everything went bad!
